Anderson,
Thanks for fielding that one for me, I was thinking the same thing.
Matt,
No defeatist attitude...I don't train people that I don't think have potential.
Anyways, to the topic at hand. This is what I see from a glance:
First thing I'll tackle is the draw. You don't get a dry grip before the actual draw. Both strong and weak hand need to move down to the gun and reception point faster. A small hesitation before you take the gun out of the holster. Your balance isn't on your toes which means the gun is going to push you around a bit. When the actual gun is taken out, you form the grip in a good place, however when driving to the target your head drops a lot and your shoulders rise. The only movement during the draw should be your arms. The first 2 steps of the draw (establishing the grip and getting the weakhand on the gun) need to be done as fast as you can. Slow down a bit driving the gun to the target in order to get your sight picture as soon as possible. Remember that it doesn't matter how fast the gun gets out there...the only thing that is important is how fast it is out there ready to shoot. You can complete the draw in a half second, but if it takes you a second to find your sights, you've gained nothing.
On the reload. Your weakhand hesitates near the gun before grabbing the spare mag. You reload with the gun a little too far away from your body and also very low. It seemed like when drawing your mag you had a bit of a wierd grip on it (can't see for sure) try and make sure that you have your pointer finger indexed along the front of the mag. Try and do everything from the high ready which is basically a plane starting at your neck. Do everything from there or higher. ALWAYS make sure you look the mag into the gun. I would recommend getting the mag to the gun as fast as possible then having a slight pause just outside the magwell to confirm the orientation and direction your mag is going. That quarter of a second you pause is well worth it because done correctly, you will NEVER miss a reload.
That's what I could see off the bat. Hope it helps.